Please make sure that you don’t use many outside sources and focus on

 

OTHER:Nice work I like the way that you wrote the essay.But, first, why did you separate the paragraphs! It would be much better if you take off the words like Introduction + Fashion + ……….. +conclusion. Also, I uploaded three articles which you have to use them at least once in each paragraph to support your essay, and that required in the essay also you have to mention them like (O’connor 160) or things like that and you know about than me.
Please make sure that you don’t use many outside sources and focus on the three articles that I sent it to you
Thank you.

Thank you for cooperation.